06 September 2013

Encrusted

Heavy metal oxidant
sometimes happens without accident.
Lost of mobility and function;
fused at the junction where freedom
once rested. Oiled and tested
and yet you remain rusted.

© JPW 2013

Poetry Jam - The Thing About Rust...

16 comments:

  1. I could feel the rust... thanks so much for taking part in the jam!

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    1. You're welcome, and thank you for making me feel so at the "Jam" in return. Rust penetrates deeply. You should "feel" it in the resistance. Glad you stopped to read me, Laurie.

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  2. Great words. rust just keeps on growing and killing, you have to deal with it. Lots of oil.

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    1. Surely Alan, you've dealt with "rust" as we all have in life. Just the right oil can make things work out! Thanks for visiting.

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  3. loss of mobility ?
    I like the inner rhyme of function and junction, and the use of encrusted.

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    1. Rust does seem to encase everything it attaches to, aprille! Encrusted seemed to combine exactly that thought! Thanks for the comment!

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  4. sometimes you just cant fight the rust...and no matter what you do it is going to take over

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    1. Ah, but staying in the battle is the key, Brian! Maybe we don't beat the rust, but we aren't defeated by it either! ;)

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  5. Kind of like my body approaching 72?

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    1. Or mine approaching 70, too! Hang in there Helen. There's plenty of "oil" (love) out here to keep you nimble! Thanks for stopping by!

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  6. Where freedom once rested--loved that phrase--the whole poem is wonderfully written :-)

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    1. "Rust" is constricting, isn't it? The freedom is what we miss the most. Thanks for the kind words, SaraV!

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  7. Ah, sometimes nothing can remove the effects of the rust!

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    1. You're right, Mary. But we can't give up trying! Thanks for coming by.

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  8. Love the internal rhyme and the word play ... gotta keep things moving forward or rust becomes a big problem ... this from a crusty old fogie with a rusty old knee!

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    1. Sometimes, a little rust adds character! Crusty old fogies have a lot of character! Thanks for visiting, Susan.

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