18 September 2013

Free Falling



Free Falling

Always lost in love
as I stand above
the sea,
waiting for a shove
to fly like a dove.
And me?
I fall to the cove,
and faster I move,
So free!

© JPW – 2013

Poetic  Asides by Robert Lee Brewer – Lai Form Challenge
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2 comments:

  1. Mary18 September, 2013 07:24

    Beautifully expressed. I FEEL the freedom in this poem.

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    1. Unknown20 September, 2013 10:43

      Thanks Mary. I tried to let the two syllable lines stand out for a mini-poem within the lai. I set those free from the convention of the form! I feel like such a... rebel! ;)

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